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[Zhou Wolf]

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During June 14th to June 23rd of 2008, ten lifelong unforgettable days. I was in Shanghai. A city I yearning for!
First came to Shanghai, I was amazed by a forest of skyscrapers. The beautiful girls there impressed me the most. There leaved some of my “first”. First take an underground, first go to McDonald’s, first see 4D (four-dimensional) movies… Of course! First go to Shanghai.
They accompanied me for first two days. And the rest 8 days, I went out and played all by myself. First independence day, I went within an inch of a wrong way. I nearly went to the easternmost Shanghai. I reached Gangcheng Road. Then with a series of hard search, I came back home. First independence day. Interesting, exciting and a little tired.
Other days, all were right. I went to Huangpu River. I see the Oriental Pearl Tower, I see Shanghai’s tallest building—Shanghai Global Financial Hub. I liked the smell of Huangpu River. I went to Fudan University, a place formerly belongs to me.

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I was in Shanghai, a city I have been yearning for.

While there visited for the first time, 1) Took an underground. etc.